Edit, Write, Edit

©Elnur Fotolia.com
Note: This dork is NOT my Eddie, nor is this the cover.

So, I’ve been busier than usual. I wouldn’t have thought that possible, to be honest. First, my wonderful editor has completed work on my completed draft, The Brooklyn Trace, which some of you may remember began as “Skip Tracer” here on this blog. I’ve posted a sample below because … reasons.

The morning of our flight to New York, well before sunrise, a perfumed, naked Mina woke me up by slipping into the small bed with me. I remember being in a dream wherein I was an antelope being chased by a herd of cougars, and the next thing I knew I was completely naked and this gorgeous woman was kissing my neck and telling me to wake up because I’d somehow made her horny. In between kisses and being submerged in her oceanic expanse of passion I probed, trying to discover what I’d done to trigger her arousal.

Her answer was, “You can be so dumb sometimes,” followed by, “Hush. You’re spoiling the mood.”

Now, the way I see it, when a pretty girl wants to be in control and you are both nude, you yield. So I did. She was a tidal wave, this woman, lashing my shores until I feared that by the time she ebbed there would be nothing left of me but a driftwood shell. Afterward she rolled sweetly into my arms, smiled up at me, and fell into sleep. Even a hard case like me has to admit that was the best part.

Next on the agenda is to write a blurb, summary, and query letter. I think I’m going to try my hand at traditional publishing with this one because the plot is more mainstream and indie publication is just more work than I care to put into book selling. I have time to a) write or b) sell. I don’t have time for both. If I don’t get the type of response I’m looking for, then I’ll revert to doing it myself. We shall see.

I made my editor cry on this one, so I’m hopeful. (No, not because I failed to pay on time, smart ass.) It’s because of all the “feels” in the book. (I adore this editor, btw.) The book is funny, sexy, touching, full of action, and at times, sad. I like it, and think you will to.

Next up is my new girl.

Dark Cover
Jeanne Dark – coming soon! Look for her.

I’ve been in love with her for over a year, but she’s still playing hard to get. To break the tedium of all those seconds in between working at my day job, sleeping, and missing my angel, I’ve been slowly working on her book, which is named after my lead, Jeanne Dark. I’ve completely finished the plot outline, so it’s just a matter of writing the book. I’m 40,000 words in. You can find excerpts here, here, and here if you’re interested.

Technically, you can find them there even if you’re not interested. It’s like the tree falling in the woods question — it makes a sound whether you’re there or not.

But I digress.

Since writing Jeanne and Foss’s book is much, much harder than the previous books (there seems to be an inverse relationship between how hard it is to write and how proficient one is at it) I’ve begun editing Discovery.

Now, some of you may be wondering why, since it’s in its 2nd edition already. The answer is simple: I’m not happy with sales. My conscience has been telling me I’ve been marketing The Stream series all wrong. I must admit she’s right.


Indeed, even the name of the series and the books will likely change in the new edition. Something distinctly more dragonish and fantasy evoking, I imagine. I’ll also probably seek out publishers in the UK. When the 1st two books were finished (2009 – 2011) the Fantasy Fiction world was ensconced with vampires, werewolves, and zombies. That’s all that sold (other than Harry You-know-who) and all people were interested in. Perhaps the time is ripe.

The Stream

The Stream is probably more Visionary Fiction than Fantasy Fiction, and I’ll try to make that clearer. It’s pretty obvious by the 3rd book. It was obvious to Maria right away, but less so to others. I’m thinking I might bring the dragons out sooner. They don’t appear until midway through the 1st book now. Of course, that would mean making it longer, which I don’t want to do.

The difficulty is that I’ve changed and my writing has changed. While I’ve always gotten good reviews for Discovery, I’m finding myself doing a lot of rewrites early on. Frankly, I don’t know who this Bill Jones guy is, but I don’t like his style much. (Well, I do, it’s just different than my more-evolved style.) It’ll be a line to touch up the rough bits without chucking it all in the rubbish bin. We’ll see how I make out.

Anyway, that’s me. What’s up with you?


12 thoughts on “Edit, Write, Edit

  1. Arkenaten says:

    Are there still mainstream publishers that allow submissions without an agent?
    I have never found one.
    And its worse for genre fiction.

    If you come across one, let me know!

    1. Bill Jones, Jr. says:

      No, I don’t think there are. My real process would be to go through an agent. I’m just trying not to think about that. 🙂

      I’m also not going to promote The Brooklyn Trace as genre fiction, although I’m certain that won’t go over well. I don’t think it fits the mold of a detective story. In fact, that’s really the wrapper to what’s more a character story involving a man who falls for two sisters.

  2. ontyrepassages says:

    You sure hit on it: it’s difficult to go back. I completed my larger-than-Texas fantasy novel in the mid 90s and knew then I needed to break it into multiple stories. Then life happened, and in a big way. One life crisis followed another culminating with an illness that stole three years of my life. I returned to writing slowly, starting with poetry. My writing changed, partly because I’d changed. My writing evolved as I absorbed more influences and wrote more. When I finally revisited the fantasy world I’d created I discovered the world itself held-up just fine, but the writing sucked. I scrapped it all, which made it easy to break it down because I reduced it to a pile of rubble.

    Currently my website is under construction. Actually, I’m the only construction worker at the moment (working on a new About, establishing MailChimp, etc.). The designer will waltz in and make the final changes in early April. I’m assembling a poetry collection that I hope to e-publish after the website is complete…so the 2nd or 3rd week of April. The first fantasy novel I want complete by the time its online counterpart concludes, so that’s probably around June/July. In the midst of all that there was establishing a business email and P.O. Box along with continuing to finalize my relocation. Whew!

    1. Bill Jones, Jr. says:

      Well, you certainly have a lot ahead of you, but it will worth it in the end. I wish you luck.

      I think over time, as we change, the words don’t so much suck as they stop representing who we are now. This 1st book is probably still pretty well written, because I made myself go through 6 iterations before I published it. However, it’s no longer me. That’s the problem.

Comments are closed.